New Story Challenge

Hey, everyone! I really liked Michelle ideal the "once a pound time story." So here is another story to run away with!



Story begins here:

It was 3:30pm and the train just pulled into the Lipton city train station. Two young students stepped up to the yellow boarding line.

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26 replies since 7th March 2011 • Last reply 7th March 2011

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Staring down at the line, they realized that it was, in fact, not the thick yellow strip of paint they had expected but an incredibly long yellow snake.

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Reply #2:

The students let out a scream of surprise at the sight of the long yellow snake. A man in a purple and yellow clown suit from down the ramp yelled. Sunny,is that you?!

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'Yesssss' said the snake and he started to move in the direction of the clown scaring all the people on it's way by biting in there diraction.

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All but one lady in the crowd of screaming people who dared to step forward and seized the snake. No, no, this won't do. She said shaking a finger at the snake.

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"You know better than to hang around here pretending to be a yellow line. Dress up is for at home." She shouted

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The snake hissed and had the audacity to stick out his skinny, slithery tongue at her! "What's it to ya?"

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Just then the women turned into a vampire :O The crowd ran away screaming except one little boy

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Reply #8:

the little boy ran up to the snake and started tickling its belly.
Ill save you lady yelled the little boy.

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Reply #9:

It turns out the vampiress was just about to sink her hungry fangs, dripping with poison, into the yellow annoyance when the boy jumped into the way. The snake was knocked onto the railway, and squished by a train. The boy, however, had his neck turned at such an angle that the vampiress was easily able to sink her pointy canines into his soft, sweet flesh.

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Reply #10:

But instead of the boy turning into a vampire, the vampiress turned into a boy.

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Reply #11:

The original boy was shocked. Where the lady had once stood was his twin, who had been missing for two years. His brother...was a VAMPIRE?! And not only a vampire, but an OLD LADY VAMPIRE?!

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Reply #12:

Lol, I love what you ladies have done with the story. I will be adding a few lines of my own soon.

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You'll a vampire? The Orininal boy shriek in surprise. Well yeah, but and old lady vampire. Wow! Its feels good to be a boy againHis twin said checking all his limbs.

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when the twins finished chatting, they decided it was time to go home. As they walked towards the exit, a strong wind came rushing down the subway tunnel. The boy's twin suddenly jerked around in fear.

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